请英语大神帮我检查下这段话有没有语法错误 In the era of web2.0 that mobile ne

请英语大神帮我检查下这段话有没有语法错误
In the era of web2.0 that mobile network becomes common, with the popularity of social media and the rise of new media, the UGC (user generated content) presents the characteristics of high output and high quality. Penetrating deep into the online life of audience, UGC becomes an integral part of the transmission about network information. Merchants began to attach importance to the UGC and its spread influence, and attempt actively to apply UGC to more and more commercial promotion. Thereinto, the innovative application of the Netease Cloud Music’s UGC spread, which indicates the new trend of the brand communication in the mobile Internet era while drastically promotes the development of the Netease Cloud Music, drew the greatest repercussions in the industry and has a high value of case study.