虽然通过了BEC高级,可只有一个C的成绩。
随BEC和雅思都出自剑桥之手,可不同之处仍显而易见。
刚刚转入雅思,一些问题希望得到高手的解答。
最近刚尝试写了份雅思的大作文,感觉真的好像回到了BEC的考试当中啊,因为模式几乎一模一样,呵呵。
题目如下:
In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies.
Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
作文如下
When it comes to the time for transforming from high school to university, young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year or more. However, not only advantages but also disadvantages are coming our together currently.
Many physical and psychological experts, for a long time, have reached a common idea that a travel and relocation would probably change people’s mood and be effective for releasing high pressure. This explains why a few families are putting more budgets in children’s expenditures on travelling plans. In addition, study with a part-time job, to some extent, allows students to foster a better understanding on their studies. Professor Allen at Cambridge University, drew a significant conclusion that his students who have worked for about one year before entering university, were far more likely to win scholarships no matter how difficult their courses were.
Despite the benefits from choosing to work or travel , argues on the negative impacts never stopped. Mrs. June, a mother of a Junior student in one college, complained for the year his son spent in working out before studying at college, had ruined his whole life. There is a fact that intensive cultural effects and complicated social lures leave young people nothing but volatile misunderstanding on the world, particular to whom are weak in self-controlling abilities. Worse than that, one year gap causes potential difficulties in sustaining their education and building their knowledge basis.
Based on these analyses, personally I suggest we students shall make this decision depending on our different personalities. Young students who are strongly self-controlled, holding determined objectives and good at time –management, are definitely advised to challenge themselves after completing their high school.
需要大家讨论下,只要评论客观,都可以加分哈,多谢了。但请不要过于刺激哈哈,呵呵,毕竟第一次接触雅思大作文嘛。
可能是描述方面的欠缺,我想表达的意思是 请大家帮忙提下这篇写作里面存在的问题,就像二楼的大哥(大姐)所说的,我的描述对象并没有把握好,因此容易引起分数受争议。在此,谢谢啦。也希望高手们能不惜赐教,小弟一定感激不尽哈,嘿嘿。