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《思念》-汪国真 〈yearn〉-Wang Guozhen
思念 Yearn
我叮咛你的 What I've baden you,
你说 不会遗忘 you said,its never gotta be sank into oblivion
你告诉我的What You've told me ,
我也 全都珍藏i also, shall always treasure them all
对于我们来说 To us
记忆是飘不落的日子 Memories are like the persistent days
——永远不会发黄 will never turn yellowing
相聚的时候 总是很短 At the time of togetherness,its always so short
期待的时候 总是很长At the time of expectation,its always so long
岁月的溪水边The Stream side of the years
捡拾起多少闪亮的诗行has picked up countless twinkling stich
如果你要想念我 Once if you expect to miss me
就望一望天上那 Do look up
闪烁的繁星 at those glittery stars heavenly!
有我寻觅你的 (coz)inside is my sight seeking for you
目——光 imaginative-------ness

译：留学语言学者---顾琼雯
回答者：kimivanny - 助理 三级 11-21 15:14

Miss
I give repeated exhortations you
You say Will not forget
You told me
Even I All collect
To us
Life not falling that memory floats
--Will never turn to be yellow
While meeting It is always very short
While looking forward to It is always very long
By the stream of years
How many glittering hexameters are picked up and is picked up
If you want to miss me
Look at that in the sky
Flashing star in great numbers
I seek you
Eye - -Smooth

思念 remember...
我叮咛你的 what I told you
你说 不会遗忘 you said: you wont lost it
你告诉我的 what you told me
我也 全都珍藏 I'll solve it in my blood
对于我们来说 all things for us
记忆是飘不落的日子 memery is a leaf in the air which never landing
——永远不会发黄 wont became yellow
相聚的时候 总是很短 it's short when happy.
期待的时候 总是很长 bu missing is so long
岁月的溪水边 at the age of the rivers
捡拾起多少闪亮的诗行 how many bright poets we have?
如果你要想念我 if you want to miss me
就望一望天上那 just have a look the sky
闪烁的繁星 stars are there
有我寻觅你的 and me
目光 too

---by KingsonUK

刚才翻译的，估计没可能被采纳了，但求LZ喜欢。

Remember fondly
I advice repeatedly to yours
You say and can't forget
You tell mine
I am too all to all collect as treasure
For we to say
The memory is a day to float to do not fall
—— can never hair Huang
The time of gathering together is always very short
The expectant time is always very long
The river water side of the years
Collect to rise how much 闪s bright poem line
If you want to think of me
Hope in the sky that
Heavy star of gleaming
Having me looks for yours
Eyes —— light

Missing
I urge you
You said cannot forget
You tell me
I also all collect
As for us
The memory is the day which flutters does not fall
¨d¨d never can turn yellow
Gathers time very is always short
Anticipation time very is always long
Nearby year mountain stream
Picks line which picks up how many to glisten
If you have to think of me
Looks space that
Glitters stars
Has me to search you
Eyes-light
Missing
I urge you
You said cannot forget
You tell me
I also all collect
As for us
The memory is a day which flutters does not fall
¨d¨d never can turn yellow
Gathers time very is always short
Anticipation time very is always long
Nearby year mountain stream
Picks line which picks up how many to glisten
If you must think of me
Looks space that
Glitters stars
Has me to search you
Item ¨d¨d light

Misses
me to urge you
you to say cannot forget
you to tell me
me also all to collect
which the line which which
is flutters regarding our memory
does not fall the day - -
never to be able to turn yellow gathers nearby the time
always very short anticipation time
always very long years
mountain stream picks picks up how many to glisten
if you must think of I
look space that
twinkle the stars
have me to search your
item - - light

The 《 remember fondlies the 》 - 汪 the country true
Remember fondly
I advice repeatedly to you
You say and can't forget
You tell my
I am too all to all collect as treasure
Say for us
The memory is a 飘 not the 落 's day
—— can never hair Huang
The time of gather togethering is always and very short
The anticipation's time is always and very long
The years's river water side
Collect to rise how much 闪s bright poem line
If you want to think of me
Hope on hoping in the sky that
Heavy 星 of gleaming
Have me to look for you
目—— light